GS Advent Main Thread (3 Supplement Articles+Enlisted Ranks)

[NewLondenion]

I had a realization that my attempt at my Pariahs fanfic was going to be a lot more difficult and taxing than I originally thought; mainly because I was overcompensating for GSD's story flop.

Now a year later I've given the story an overhaul. Soon I'm going to start uploading it to DA and posting links and extra information here.

Since it's still a work-in-progress, I can only reveal a few things on here until I do get to posting it.

Now, for my little intro:

The Bloody Valentine Wars; two conflicts which enacted heavy costs and nearly annihilated humanity in drives for power. When the dust settled the world seemed to realize how horribly close they were to their own demise. Some nations - under the Earth Alliance - decided to abandon plans of eliminating the Coordinators to focus on reconstruction and strengthening their alliances. New slogans and propaganda praised a new Earth Alliance that sought peace and understanding.

In the years after the Bloody Valentine Wars, a new global superpower was born in the form of the Union of Earth Sphere Nations. Their directive: to bring all of the Earth Sphere into a mutual cooperation for the benefit of humanity in the hopes of eliminating war altogether.

Now, in the Year 78 of the Cosmic Era, the Alliance and Union governments are now poised against each other as try strive for total control of the Earth Sphere and a new Cold War begins.


CHAPTER LISTING
Click "Download" on the left to see each chapter.

CHAPTER ONE: EMBERS
http://newlondenion.deviantart.com/art/ ... S-96151869

CHAPTER TWO: POWERS
http://newlondenion.deviantart.com/art/ ... -130969620

CHAPTER THREE: DAMAGED GOODS

CHAPTER FOUR: HUMAN

CHAPTER FIVE: TBD

SUPPLEMENTAL ARTICLES

2/5/CE77 AKTAEON LEAVES EURASIA - ENN.com
http://newlondenion.deviantart.com/art/ ... -132364014
15/3/CE75 ECONOMIC FUTURE GLOOMY - ENN.com
http://newlondenion.deviantart.com/art/ ... -148632184
10/8/CE75 NANIWA-SEASTAR - KYODO NEWS UEO
http://newlondenion.deviantart.com/art/ ... -148633883
28/8/2108 DUBLIN JOINS LONDON - BBC.co.uk
http://newlondenion.deviantart.com/art/ ... -148689922

UESN MILITARY RANKS - OFFICERS
http://newlondenion.deviantart.com/art/ ... -136723450
UESN MILITARY RANKS - ENLISTED
http://newlondenion.deviantart.com/art/ ... -148842038

IMPORTANT EVENTS POST-GUNDAM SEED DESTINY

CE 74

-PLANTs and Orb sign an armistice ending the Second Bloody Valentine War.

-African Community, now a member of the Earth Alliance, annexes the South African Union and deploys forces to secure formerly-Eurasian territory in Arabia.

CE 75

-Eurasian civil conflict begins.

-East Asia forcefully acquires the Japanese island of Hokkaido.

CE 76

-Atlantic Federation president establishes the Annual Global Peace Conference.

-Construction on the Strategic Anti-Orbital Weapon platform in Earth orbit begins.

-PLANTs engineers increase cleanup operation of the N-Jammers deployed during the First Bloody Valentine War.

CE 77

-Eurasian civil conflict ends. Evidence of outside assistance to the rebel powers by pro-Alliance Aktaeon staff forces the Eurasian Federal Council to arrest the leadership responsible. Eurasian Aktaeon facilities are reorganized into a new corporation: Omicron Industries

-Deep Space Survey and Development Organization unveils the Voiture Lumiere Drive System to be used on ships traveling long distances through space.

-Eurasia and Orb create the Union of Earth Sphere Nations: an alliance based on mutual cooperation.

CE 78

-Equatorial Union and Kingdom of Scandinavia sign into the UESN.

-Martian scientists are brought in to develop a gene therapy to counter the 3rd-Generation sterility problem in Coordinators.

-Fighting in African-occupied Arabia spurs the UESN into dispatching forces to stop the fighting and removing Africa's grip over the region.


MAIN ARMED FACTIONS

UNION OF EARTH SPHERE NATIONS:

Hyuga-class
A new single-hulled escort carrier built to support the Takemikazuchi-class carriers of the Orb Fleet. The Hyuga can carry up to six standard mobile suits or eight Murasame units. Its smaller size also makes it faster and more maneuverable. Only a handful of these vessels have been produced since the formation of the Union.

SPECIAL TACTICS RECONNAISSANCE INTELLIGENCE KEY ENFORCER (STRIKE):

Mobile Weapons
Model Number: MVF-M11E
Name: Strike Murasame
Manufacturer: Morgenroete, Inc.
Operator: UESN Special Tactics Reconnaissance Intelligence Key Enforcer Command
Head Height: 17.8m
Weight: max gross weight 41.5tns
A redesigned version of the M11C used by the Orb Forces. This new variant has had a cosmetic upgrade with much of the armor plating having been trimmed or redesigned to be more aerodynamic and more closely applied to the frame of the unit. This decreases the weight increasing speed. The beam rifle was also redesigned to be smaller and more efficient. The M11E does not incorporate the swing-wing design of the new M11D Murasame of the regular Orb Forces. A number of units are produced exclusively for the new STRIKE.



EARTH ALLIANCE:

Mobile Weapons
Model Number: GAT-04C
Name: Windam Bloc III (C-type)
The C-type Windam is the latest upgrade package. More simplified joint mechanics make movements quicker and smoother. Service upgrades to the energy distribution systems to the weapons make them more efficient decreasing the taxing on the main batteries. The new standard beam rifle is smaller than the original model but doesn’t sacrifice much in terms of output.


Model Number: GAT-04+AQM/E-D12
Name: Destroid Windam
With the Alliance forces undergoing various changes and upgrades to their current forces, there was an opening for a ground-based unit capable of going up against both standard and aerial mobile suits and weaponry. The backpack of this Windam variant is built to mount a number of weapon systems. Arm weapons include a short-range gatling cannon and a long-range beam rifle. The hardpoints near the shoulders can be used to mount missile launchers and grenade launchers. The feet are also modified with retractable heavy tires to give the Destroid Windam added mobility on land.

Vehicles & Support Craft
Thunderbird-class
An aerial battleship shaped like a giant wing, the Alliance sought its design as an alternative to the Archangel-class. With multiple anti-ground, sea, and air armaments and an internal hangar, the Thunderbird is capable of launching assaults with heavy firepower, mobile suits and support craft. It's mobility makes it more suited to responding to crisis situations as a formidable force multiplier.

Archangel-class
The introduction of the Thunderbird was believed to be the final stake that killed the Archangel project altogether as there was little need for such a ship. As a result, the Archangel-class undergoes several changes and is put into a limited-production basis. The refit is longer than the original. The mobile weapons capacity was increased and a third Gottfried cannon was added behind the bridge tower. The Valiant cannons have been replaced by smaller two-barrel versions that can fire at a higher rate than their predecessors.

[NewLondenion]

*Removed for space*

[ShadowCell]

This is the fanfiction forum, so please, like, post some fanfiction.

[NewLondenion]

Sorry for being such a fat @$$ about this, but I finally posted my first chapter. I had several details I had to work out about the story before I could go ahead.

There is a link in the first post of this thread and below. Hope you enjoy it. Please give feedback both here and on my Deviantart page.


http://newlondenion.deviantart.com/art/ ... S-96151869

[Imperial]

I had a little trouble accessing this, to be quite honest. I just got dumped into a page with a map of the Middle East. I have a deviantart account, but I don't use it often. Tip off the non-DA users, alright?

At any rate, I was pleasantly surprised. A lot of authors spend way too much time planning out their terms, suits, and time lines, leaving everything else to fall by the wayside. In fact, it often times seems a ploy to obscure their horrible writing. If they put that much time and thought into the idea, how can it possibly be awful? YOU JUST DON'T UNDERSTAND.

(My experience with the fanfiction community has left me a wee bit jaded, wouldn't you say?)

But I can sincerely say that is not the case here. I'm impressed by your style. It's quite polished and you handle the language very well. The battles move along at a quick clip without rushing. However, I have two main gripes.

First of all, this feels like a revival of everything we've seen before. We start off with a pair of powerful, upper crust-types plotting the annihilation of the Coordinator. You quickly flip some things on their head, but it still looks like we're heading down an old road we've walked twice before. There's nothing wrong with the idea, per se, but why bother regurgitating, you know? Secondly, your expository passages grate a bit. Honestly, there's not a lot I can say to make this better. The readers need the information to know what's going on but it's jarring when you put aside entire paragraphs to describe every last member of the team, their armaments, and the situation at hand. That information needs to be in there somewhere or we will be totally lost, but the current method of injecting it is a bit crude. "Info dump" comes to mind.

Still, on the whole, it's actually a very nice production. I didn't have my sites set very high (for reasons outlined above), but you blew my expecations out of the water.

[NewLondenion]

Thanks for the comments.

I won't say anything in regards to your assumption about that first bit only to say that it's not quite how you perceive. I aim to further show that distinction in the future.

[NewLondenion]

Chapter Two has finally been posted. Hopefully I'll have the third chapter posted in the Fall.

The insert song mentioned in there is "Atradaitoshi" from the game Extreme-G III.

Click on "Download" on the left side to read it.

[NewLondenion]

The first supplement article (one of which will hopefully be over a dozen) has been posted. This one deals with how Aktaeon Industries is ultimately shoved out of the Eurasian Federation prior to the formation of the UESN.

Click on "Download" to read the article.

[NewLondenion]

Now I added a set of military ranks for the UESN, specifically the officers.

You can check it out here:

http://newlondenion.deviantart.com/art/ ... -136723450


And new chapter titles are up, both currently being worked on.

[NewLondenion]

I added new supplement articles since I don't have Chapter Three ready yet. One is a report from the ECOSOC, one talks of a new undersea drilling project, and the other is an older article from the early days of the Cosmic Era with Ireland joining the UK.

Edit: I also added a rank diagram for enlisted.