Gundam Seed Pariahs: Phase 1, Part 1 [please comment]

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Gundam Seed Pariahs: Phase 1, Part 1 [please comment]

Post by NewLondenion » Wed Mar 21, 2007 8:37 am

I've been working on this for over a year on this continuation fanfic and it's still a work-in-progress piece so I won't really be shelling out the chapters until the summer months out of school. The first chapter, Phase 1, is my prologue meta-chapter and is split into several parts.

The year is 77 of the Cosmic Era, three years after the Battle at the Messiah. Earth and the PLANTs have managed to somewhat bury the hatchet between them as reconstruction continues. A new organization, MOBIUS, was created in the wake of peace talks years before and now begins to take the stage in what could become an Alliance civil war. Their primary weapons: the Variable Assault Dreadnaught battleships and the new MBF Jaeger mobile suits.

That's all I can think to say for now. Because I'm writing this with no regard for length, I'm posting this fanfic on my deviantart website. It doesn't matter whether or not you're a member of deviantart. Anyone should be able to read it. I also have a few info pages that lays out events up to Phase 1. If you have any ideas or comments, please feel free to post them here or on my deviantart site.

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Post by Antares » Wed Mar 21, 2007 9:41 am

Interesting, I took a quick look. More material for commenting more needed. ;) Plus, I couldn't help but note you also went for the abbreviation "GSP" as did I in my own fic.
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Post by mcred23 » Wed Mar 21, 2007 3:53 pm

NewLondenion, you'll need to remove that avatar. It's over the 80 x 80 pixel limit we have here.
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Post by RedShirt0909 » Mon Apr 09, 2007 12:51 pm

Seems like a decent read so far. I really can't see Sai as a leader, much less the CO of a battlewagon, but that's all I really don't like. To echo Antares, I need to see more before I form a solid opinion. Any idea how often/regularly this will be updated?
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Post by Antares » Mon Apr 09, 2007 2:57 pm

Has it gotten longer? If you add bits, please let us know.

Cathas as a main character is pretty interesting. And every Gundam series needs a scene where you get handguns out. General security in CE sucks. :D Remember not to make Cathas too shiny, or else he will be punished by Kira for trying to appear better than him. :wink:
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*Almost everyone I've killed uttered similar last words.
-Then I am glad once again that you are on my side.
*They've often said that too.

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