Mobile Suit Gundam SEED: Jupiter's Dawn

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Mobile Suit Gundam SEED: Jupiter's Dawn

Post by Overlord Zaru » Fri Jun 24, 2011 9:51 am

And here we shall have the preview for the latest work by the man behind Sum of our Choices and One and Only Son!

In addition, the minds of Asmus, Maderfole, myself, and even ShadowCell have given some help into making this idea a reality.

So ladies(if there are any) and gentlemen! I am proud to present to you:

Mobile Suit Gundam SEED: Jupiter's Dawn!

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7112935/1/
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Re: Mobile Suit Gundam SEED: Jupiter's Dawn

Post by Overlord Zaru » Thu Dec 01, 2011 5:50 pm

Chapters 2 and 3 have been published.
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Re: Mobile Suit Gundam SEED: Jupiter's Dawn

Post by Antares » Mon Dec 05, 2011 5:58 am

Just one typo in the first chapter:
"At times like this, a little bit of acting never hurts." Athrun signed
--> "At times like this, a little bit of acting never hurts." Athrun sighed

The only real new stuff seemed to be, and correct me if I'm wrong, the introduction of Alvarez and the Jovian Dawn. OK, interesting. I saw that at point you jumped through the story in Destiny, more or less expecting your readers knew what was going on there. That's OK, if that's the call you've decided to make. As such, I was more interested to see what you added to the story. Scirocco's name smacks fairly UCish to me. ;)

I'll try to get around to readings chapters 2-3 later.
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