Gundam 0079 Parody

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Gundam 0079 Parody

I did a parody of Gundam 0079 a few months ago, using characters from my fan series, but I'm not too sure about how you guys would react...

I mean, in the process of making it people either ignored my requests for advice or just went fanboy and blew me off.
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Re: I don't know, what do you think?

abaoaqu wrote:I did a parody of Gundam 0079 a few months ago, using characters from my fan series, but I'm not too sure about how you guys would react...

I mean, in the process of making it people either ignored my requests for advice or just went fanboy and blew me off.
Is it meant to be funny?
If it is, then you probably have nothing to worry about.

From my personal experiences, people here at Mahq tend to be FAR more rational than folks at say... GameFAQ's.
I'd say your odds are pretty good.
I mean, I'm rewriting G-SAVIOUR and the people here didn't hulk out on me, or spew hate in my direction.
Instead, they offered constructive criticism on what should and should not be in an entertaining story.
One of the proud, the willing, and the seemingly growing number of... G-Saviour fanboys.
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(Well... here goes nothing...)


Sonic Babies: The Mobile Suit Gundam Parody
ACT 1


The Good Guys (Sonic Babies)
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Amuro Ray: Sonic
Fraw Bow: Mina
Bright Noah: Kevin
Sayla Mass: Amy
Mirai Yashima: Vanilla
Hayato Kobayashi: Tails
Kai Shiden: Knuckles
Ryu Jose: Ryan
Oscar Dublin: Joey
Marker Clan: Pine
Matilda Ajan: Sally

The Godless Zeons (SB & Family Guy)
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Char Aznable: Shadow
Degwin Zabi: Peter Griffin
Gihren Zabi: Dr. Eggman (Dr. Robotnik)
Garma Zabi: Stewie Griffin
Dozle Zabi: Chris Griffin
Kycilia Zabi: Meg Griffin
Ramba Ral: Carter Pewterschmidt
Crowley Hamon: Barbara Pewterschmidt
Denim: Jasper
Gene: Ricardo
Slender: Bruce the Performance Artist

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(Azuke House, night)

(There is a storm going on outside, the kids are sitting around watching TV)

(A Romantic Comedy movie is playing; the leads are just about to kiss when...)

(A transformer blows up, all the power goes out)

Sonic: Okay... How many times has this happened?
Shadow: What are going to do now?
Kevin: Maybe Kyle can tell you a story.
Kyle: Why always me?
Kevin: Come on, it's one of your best assets.
Kyle: Well... alright. I know a story none of you have ever heard. Well, Kevin and a lot of kids back at the turn of the century have heard it, but paid no attention. It's a story of war, sacrifice, political intrigue, and space! The story of MOBILE SUIT GUNDAM.
Kevin: Which one? There's a bunch of MOBILE SUIT GUNDAMs. Is it SEED?
Kyle: No.
Kevin: G-Gundam?
Kyle: No.
Kevin: WING?
Kyle: (Angrily) Especially not WING! (Calmly) I'm telling the story of the original 1979 anime classic. Gather around kids... here we go...

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NOTE: KEEP IN MIND THAT THE PROTAGONISTS ARE PLAYED BY CHARACTERS FROM "SONIC BABIES", SO DON'T GET MAD.
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"In the decades after the Earth's swollen population began overflowing into outer space, hundreds of massive colonies took shape around the planet. Within their cylindrical walls, people tried to recreate their own environment. Generations were born, lived and dies in these artificial worlds. Here they thrived in peaceful contentment until Universal Century 0079."

(Footage of the opening battles of the war)

"Having renamed themselves 'the Principality of Zeon', Side 3 began a war of independence against the Earth Federation. People were horrified as the first month of warfare saw both sides of the conflictlose half their respective populations."

(A crippled colony falls into Sydney, Australia destroying it in a massive explosion)

"Eight months have passed since the rebellion began. They were at a stalemate."

Episode 1: Gundam Rising

(Space--Outside Side 7)

(Three Zakus approach the colony. They land on it and open a hatch and go inside)

(Side 7, Airlock)

Denim: Slender, stay here.
Slender: Yes sir.

(Two of the Zakus enter enter the colony and land on the ground)

(Amuro's house-Den)

(Fraw enters the house with Haro)

Fraw: Amuro! Amuro! He hasn't even eaten breakfast yet. Amuro!

(They go upstairs to his room)

Fraw: I should have know you'd be cooped up here.
Haro: Hello Amuro! Hello Amuro!
Amuro: You're looking very well today, Haro.
Haro: Thank you, Amuro! Thank you, Amuro!
Fraw: Hurry and dress!
Amuro: Let me finish rewiring this computer.
Fraw: Didn't you even hear the evacuation order?
Amuro: I heard a siren, but--
Fraw: Didn't you hear the the Army bulletin? A battleship's docking here, and we've been ordered to the shelters.
Amuro: Why?
Fraw: I don't know. We don't have a lot of time.
Amuro: Alright, alright, geez!
Fraw: We'll wait outside, come on Haro.

(Side 7, Outpost)

(Tractor trailers carry deactivated mobile suits to a large elevator)

Denim: That's three. Could be more in that warehouse.
Gene: *Speaks in Filipino* ("Can we, uh, you know, when we get back to the FALMEL?")
Denim: Not now, we'll do it when we get back to the Musai.
Gene: *Speaks in Filipino* ("Well, I'm going to go ahead and take out the facilit.y")

(Gene gets in his Zaku and mobilizes)

Denim: Gene! What are you doing? Hey! We're just on recon! Gene! Gene!

(Gene's Zaku aims and fires at the military base)

(Side 7, Shelter)

Old Guy: What was that?

(Murmuring)

Amuro: That explosion was pretty close!

(He gets up)

Fraw: Amuro!
Old Guy: Hey, we're to keep that door shut!
Amuro: This cardboard box won't hold. I'll ask if we can get on that ship that just docked today.
Old Guy: Hey, stop it!
Amuro: Shut the other door!

(He goes outside)

(Side 7, Outpost)

(Gene's Zaku fires into the base)

Lady: It's a Zeon Mobile Suit!
Amuro: A Zaku!

(A jeep with officers drives by)

Officer: Hey! Get back in the shelter!

(A missile hits the jeep. Amuro falls over to avoid the blast. He finds a book labeled "V" on the ground)

(He flips through it, scanning the pages)

Amuro: (To camera) I'm a speed reader.

(Explosion)

Amuro: That's it! I'm getting to this mobile suit!

(He runs to the Gundam, lying on a flatbed)

Amuro: Look at that! The power's on.

(He continues to active Gundam while the Zakus attack)

Amuro: Please, stand up! Come on! There!

(The Gundam gets up completely. Its "eyes" glow)

(Amuro fires the Gundam's vulcan cannons at the Zakus and quickly runs out of ammo)

Amuro: What? I'm out of ammo!
Gene: *Speaks Filipino*

(Gene's Zaku tries to shoot the Gundam at a point-blank range. Gundam crushes the Zaku's machine gun, rips off the ventilator, and manhandles it)

Denim: Gene! That thing's a monster!
Amuro: Oh, boy! What now?

(Gene's Zaku gets up)

Amuro: I need another weapon...

(He activates the beam saber)

Amuro: It's a lightsaber!

(A panicking Gene tries to flee)

Denim: Gene! Don't run away! Look out!

(The Zaku flies away, the Gundam cuts it in half; A tremendous explosion follows, blasting a hole in the colony's bulkhead. A great vacuum occurs.)

Amuro: Uh-oh!

(Denim's Zaku tries to charge the Gundam)

Denim: He was my partner!
Amuro: What am gonna do? If this one blows all the air in Side 7 will get sucked out. Maybe... if I am for the cockpit...

(The Zaku charges, Gundam shoves the blade through the belly of Denim's Zaku)

Bright: Get the civilians aboard WHITE BASE!
Crewman: Leak in the hull's stopped.
Bright: What about the transfer of the Gundam?
Crewman: Most of the engineers got killed in the attack, so it's not like likely we can.
Bright: then we'll have to rely on him. I dont know if he's a qualified pilot or not, but he's our only chance.

(Space--Outside Side 7)

(The Musai FALMEL, under the command of Char Aznable, fires missiles at Side 7)

Char: Where's Slender?
Crewman: He escaped the colony, he's coming.
Char: Well, nobody likes to admit the mistakes caused by our youth...

(End of part 1)

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That's it for this part. If I can get any response at all, I'll post more.

...I'll get out before you lynch me.
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(Seeing as I have mere views rather than posts, I will post the next section)

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Episode 2: Destroy Gundam!

(Space Gate)

(A missile hits the hull, blowing a hole in the wall. The resulting vacuum frightens the civilians. A soldier opens a valve, pink bubbles are drawn in by the suction, and block the hole)

Civilian: What is that stuff?
Hayato: (Tears off a bit and puts it in his mouth) It's chewing gum!

(FALMEL--Bridge)

Char: You followed my orders and Denim's, so you don't have anything to worry about.
Slender: I know it's hard to believe, but I'm not making it up, sir.
Char: Hmm...

(Side 7--Outpost)

(Sayla sees Ryu helping an injured man onto the elevator)

Ryu: Come on, we're almost there sir. Hey, what are you doing?
Sayla: The captain wants us to look for survivors.

(Kai runs by)

Sayla: Did you see anybody left?
Kai: How would I know? I barely made it myself. I wasn't going to sit around for the lost, lame, or lazy! Hey, are you guys coming?

(Sayla slaps him)

Kai: Hey! That hurt!
Sayla: You were hiding? You could have helped people, you coward!
Kai: Who made you queen of the universe?

(Sayla gets in the jeep and drives off)

Ryu: Okay, sweetheart, give us a hand.
Kai: Oh, alright.

(Side 7--Town)

(Sayla sneaks up on Char, who is examining wreckage. She's pointing a gun at him)

Sayla: Freeze! Drop what's in your hands.
Char: Well, well, you're brave, but you don't seem like much of a soldier to me.
Sayla: I'm not afraid to use this!
Char: She looks just like...
Sayla: Take off that helmet.

(Char takes it off. Sayla is shocked. Char kicks the gun out of her hand.)

Char: She can't be. She can't be Artesia...

(The Gundam arrives on the scene; Char puts his helmet back on and escapes)

Sayla: Casval?
Amuro: Climb into my hand. I've got to destroy all this wreckage.
Sayla: Yes.

(Amuro shoots the wreckage with the beam rifle, setting it all ablaze)

(Side 7--Space gate)

(The WHITE BASE eases out of the colony)

(WHITE BASE-Bridge)

(Mirai is at the helm)

Mirai: Sensors 360 degress and 100% functional.
Bright: Don't be so tense, the computer can do most of the work for you.
Mirai: Yes, sir.
Bright: Amuro!

(Amuro appears on the monitor)

Amuro: Sir?
Bright: Stay within ten kilometers of the starboard side.
Amuro: Roger.
Marker: Mr. Bright! Two incoming missiles from eleven o'clock!
Amuro: Should I shoot them?
Bright: Do it!

(Space--Outside Side 7)

(Amuro shoots one missile, then the other)

Amuro: Piece of cake.

(WHITE BASE-Bridge)

Marker: Two more objects approaching!
Bright: More missiles?
Marker: They look like mobile suits.
Bright: Zakus?
Oscar: Yes, sir. But one's coming at three times normal speed!
Bright: It's Char, the Red Comet! He managed to sink five of our ships at the Battle of Loum.

(Space--Outside Side 7)

(Char's Zaku arrives)

Char: Let's see what a Feddie mobile suit can do!
Bright: Fall back, Amuro! That red Zaku's too much for you.
Amuro: Pfft! Yeah, right!

(He fires the beam rifle and misses)

Amuro: What?

(Char shoots the Gundam with his Zaku's machine gun)

Char: Bye-bye!

(But Gundam still functions.)

Char: What? That was a direct hit!
Amuro: So... this is war!

(He keeps missing)

Amuro: No! Why can't I hit him?

(Char also has a time with the Gundam)

Char: How can it move like that!?

(Slender appears on Char's monitor)

Slender: Cmdr. Char!
Char: It's about time, Slender!
Slender: I've never seen a weapon like that before! What kind of gun is it?
Char: I don't know, as long as the pilot doesn't hit us!

(Slender's Zaku shoots at the Gundam)

Bright: You're draining the beam rifle's energy!
Amuro: Thanks, but don't worry about that!

(Amuro almost shoots down Char, but sees Slender's Zaku)

Amuro: Another enemy!

(He shoots down Slender's Zaku)

Slender: Oh no.

(It explodes)

Char: Slender...! It destroyed a Zaku with one shot. But how can its weapon be as powerful as a warship's? I'll make you pay for this!

(Char retreats)

Amuro: Oh, no you don't!

(Tries to fire the rifle again, a flag with the word "BANG" pops out of the end of the barrel)

Amuro: I guess I used it all up.

(WHITE BASE-Bridge)

(Amuro enters the bridge)

Fraw: Amuro! (She hugs him)

(Bright walks up to Amuro, with a stern look on his face)

Bright: So, you're Amuro. You've got a lot to learn. Piloting the Gundam must be more efficient!
Amuro: What? I...
Bright: In war it's "Kill or be killed"! You may think you're the right man for the job, but you haven't convinced me!
Fraw: He risked his life to save us!
Amuro: You don't have another pilot. I'M it, and if you don't like the way I fly, see if you can do better!
Bright: Feel free to hate me, I don't care. You're in charge of overseeing repairs to the Gundam. Amuro, don't make make me regret my decision, if you do, I'll make sure you regret it even more!

End of Part 2

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Okay, before I go any further, I just want to say that if you don't like the whole crossover thing, I understand.

I had three reasons why I wanted to do this:

1) As a UC Gundam fan and a Sonic fan (a rare breed), I tried to bring the two universes closer together. Besides, some of my friends don't know diddly squat about Gundam.

2) Generally, I like comedy particularily parodies (though I vomit at anything directed by Aaron Seltzer and Jason Friedberg). War is a pretty good thing to poke fun at, so that's another reason I picked Gundam.

3) To pockmark that pompous, overrated series Family Guy. I CANNOT STAND THAT SHOW! So I cast its characters as the Zeons. Why?

A little couplet:

"In Romeo and Juliet everyone cries,
In Mobile Suit Gundam everyone dies."

(Thank you Yoshiyuki Tomino)
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Okay... any suggestions on how to make this story attractable?
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Try not to mix completely different universes together. Deliberately mixing Sonic in with Gundam isn't... wise.
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'Dustin' wrote:Try not to mix completely different universes together. Deliberately mixing Sonic in with Gundam isn't... wise.
How so? That show I hate (which won't be named)... threw their characters in STAR WARS and it did well.

All I wanted to do was bring both fandoms closer together... but I guess that's an impossible dream.
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